This sentence not only identifies the prized belonging ("an old, slightly warped, blond guitar") but also suggests why the writer values it ("the first instrument that I ever taught myself how to play"). Some of the sentences below support this topic sentence with specific descriptive details. Others, however, offer information that would be inappropriate in a unified descriptive paragraph. Read the sentences carefully, and then pick out only those that support the topic sentence with precise descriptive details. When you're done, compare your responses with the suggested answers below:
Just curious, how old are you/what grade are you in? A one/maybe 2 sentence thesis is a tad short... but thats what I was taught early on. A thesis should be about 3 sentences.
Also, no matter what your essay is, analytical, persuasive, or informative, the thesis should always argue a point. If its an informative essay, why should I know this stuff ? Have insight.
And as burzvingion said: NEVER USE 1 st OR 2 nd PERSON!! , unless it is a personal experience. That means no I, you, we, my, mine, etc.
Otherwise, its a nice basic introduction to the "five-by-five". (5 paragraphs with 5 "sentences" per paragraph, although each piece of evidence can be more than 1 sentence)