Overall, this is an excellent start to a compelling essay. Keep in mind that although the committee allows you to write up to five pages, three double-spaced pages is usually adequate. Feel free to add more detail, but make sure your text is concise and transparent. You might consider "writing" ideas and then "rewriting" them. Too often, authors put ideas onto the page, but do not render those ideas compellingly. Giving your sentences a bit of extra effort, and giving your experiences a bit of extra reflection, will result in a persuasive essay that compliments your accomplishments and character.
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The best way to make such a draft is to make an outline, in which all the ideas of the essay will be assembled in a proper order and make all together one logical professional essay. If the topic for the essay is not assigned by the instruction it is first of all necessary to chose one general topic for the whole paper. A good 5-paragraph essay requires a strong thesis statement and corresponding topic sentences. Topic sentences are sentences, which add more to the thesis statement, and each is opened in a separate paragraph of the essay. Together with the introduction and conclusion paragraphs make 5 paragraphs. A 5-paragraph essay also must be supported with adequate supportive sources.